The personal statement that you submit as part of your application is your opportunity to present a richer characterization of yourself than what your transcripts can capture.
Each department that you apply to has provided a prompt (on the application form) that you should respond to with your personal statement. Be sure to address the topics in the prompt but also consider ways in which you can set yourself apart from other candidates.
Writing a Well Crafted Statement
As you write your personal statement, Ask yourself this important question: “What evidence can I provide to the admissions committee that I will be successful as an engineering student in their department?” To answer that question, you must also answer the more basic question, “What do the faculty believe are the qualities of a successful engineering student?” There is certainly a long list of attributes that would answer this question. Your personal statement should highlight the characteristics on that list that you most closely identify with, and that your experience can support.
We encourage you to take the time to write a well crafted personal statement. Such a statement demonstrates proper grammar, a logical organization, college-level language and vocabulary, and even a touch of creativity.
- Start early.
- Write an outline, then write your first draft.
- Read your drafts out loud to yourself. Or ask your friends to read them.
- Visit a writing center on campus.
All of these activities take time, which is a scarce resource in the middle of the quarter when you are busy with your courses. But the effort you invest could make a crucial difference in the impact of your application.
Avoid “Cute” or “Cliché” Descriptions of Your Motivation and Interests
Every year the faculty on the admissions committee read about Legos in the personal statements of several applicants. Many students who pursue engineering enjoyed playing with Lego bricks as children (and maybe even still do). Perhaps you look back at your enjoyment of Legos as an early indicator that you were “meant to be an engineer” but the faculty likely do not believe that a student's attraction to playing with plastic blocks has any correlation with their potential success as engineers.
Writing the personal statement can be one of the most challenging tasks among those required for graduate school admission. This task requires you to reflect upon your life and determine the experiences leading to your desire for further study in your chosen field.
- What is special, unique, distinctive or impressive about you or your life?
- When did you originally become interested in this field of study?
- What are your career goals?
- Are there any gaps or discrepancies in your academic record you should explain?
- Have you overcome any unusual obstacles?
- What are the most compelling reasons you can give for the admissions committee to be interested in you?
Do you notice a repeated positive theme in your answers? If not, you might ask a trustworthy reader to peruse your answers and offer thematic suggestions. Keep in mind that the format for your personal statement will likely be that of a story and you will not only want to catch but also maintain reader interest.
In Donald Asher's 1991 edition of Graduate Admissions Essays - What Works, What Doesn't, and Why he cautions writers against entering the Essay Hall of Shame: Errors and sloppiness, misspellings, even an occasional handwritten essay. You have to wonder how they made the grades on transcripts.
- Spelling errors, poor English.
- Anything that starts out, "I've always wanted to be a ___________."
- We ask for dates on activities. It's a red flag if all the activities are brand new.
- A whole essay on deep personal problems or excuses for past performance. It's amazing how common that is. The essay should be upbeat, convincing and persuasive.
- Too long.
- It shows no discipline.
- Don't tell me what ___________is. I know what my own discipline is! What can they be thinking? Tell me what____________means to you.
Source: Richard J. Stelzer's How to Write a Winning Personal Statement for Graduate and Professional School, 3rd Edition, published by Peterson's, 1997.
Stelzer recommends that you make sure the admissions committee has a good sense of "who you are, what makes you tick, and how different you are from other applicants....Later... you might detail some of your interest in or exposure to your particular field. You might say something to suggest to the committee that you have a realistic perception of what this field or profession entails."
Make sure you have avoided the inclusion of the references to high school accomplishments and potentially controversial subjects. The most important concern is that you are honest. Generally, keep in mind that the writing, what you say and how you say it, is the next most important concern. If your school or department asked a question in their requirements of the personal statement, be sure you answer that question within the word limits.
Stelzer suggests that you ask the reader to answer the following questions.
1. Did my opening paragraph capture your attention?
2. Did you find the statement as a whole to be interesting?
3. Did you find it to be well written?
4. Did it seem positive, upbeat?
5. Did it sound like me?
6. Do you regard it as an honest and forthright presentation of who I am?
7. Did it seem to answer the question(s)?
8. Can you think of anything relevant that I might have inadvertently omitted?
9. Is there material within the statement that seems inappropriate?
10. Did you gain any insight about me from reading this?
11. Did you notice any typos or other errors?
12. Do you think the statement has in any way distinguished me from other applications?
13. Do you think my application to __________ is logical?
If there is a writing center in the school you currently attend, request an appointment for someone there to look over your essay and offer advice for revisions.